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: My Poetry In Progress
: Atreyu March 16, 2013, 02:16:56 AM
http://poetrybymariahbyrd.blogspot.com/
Check it out and let me know what you think.
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: hanorotu March 16, 2013, 02:32:40 AM
I love all of your poetry! Keep up the good work!
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: Uriah March 16, 2013, 02:47:22 AM
I really like it! I love what you talk about, how you talk about it, and the emotions you convey. One challenge I have for you is to switch up the rhyme scheme a bit, it will make you a more diverse writer. Not every line has to rhyme, and not even the entire poem has to rhyme at all every time. It's fine if that's how you most love to write, but i would encourage you to expand your horizons. Look up some different styles and maybe you'll find your good at one of them :)
The philosophical value of your poems is amazing, and alternating it a bit more would add to the mystery, style, and uniqueness of your poetry. I look forward to seeing more of your poetry :D
+1
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: Zesh March 16, 2013, 03:00:02 AM
Hm...the poems ryhme too much :P As Uriah said, switch up your rhyme scheme and try some half rhyme and internal rhyme. Keep working at your poetry :)
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: Mordred March 16, 2013, 07:06:09 PM
Very cool stuff. I'm a fan of the tone and message especially!
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: Atreyu March 20, 2013, 05:52:46 PM
thanks for all the suggestions I will be sure to take them in account for my writing thanks for reading there are more on the way. I have some poems that are just free verse, but I wasn't sure if I should add them.
 
: Re: My Poetry In Progress
: hanorotu March 20, 2013, 06:01:50 PM
thanks for all the suggestions I will be sure to take them in account for my writing thanks for reading there are more on the way. I have some poems that are just free verse, but I wasn't sure if I should add them.
 
You should write some poetry for the Evilzone Magazine!
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: proxx March 20, 2013, 08:15:11 PM
Iam by all means no expert but ive written a fair amount of poetry myself.
I would suggest to put some breaks in it.
As already sugested, rhyme has its function but shouldnt be applied throughout.
Often poems are compared to music, there is a musical flow to it.
However not required, thinking in terms of couplet and a chorus helps.

Thanks for sharing.