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Offline Traitor4000

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Poem
« on: January 24, 2014, 03:51:37 am »
So I am pretty bad at poetry :P and this is also unedited i kinda just let my ideas flow because i needed a release from a bad day so... (i was not really happy with the final product) oh and ps. im not suicidal  :D

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Why live when each breath becomes
but a laborious task
forced upon us
Why live when each day
Is spent in a haze of boredom
 
Is this really what our modern lives
Have become
 
Walk
With your head down
Walk
In the same endless, boring cycle
 
Is this what the world
Has become
 
Why do we live with such ambivalence
To those around us
Those who need us
 
Is this what
Life has become
 
« Last Edit: January 24, 2014, 03:53:09 am by Traitor4000 »
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Re: Poem
« Reply #1 on: January 24, 2014, 09:48:31 am »
+1 for sharing it. I don't 100% with the statement but in the end it's a poem, those are your feelings :)
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Re: Poem
« Reply #2 on: January 24, 2014, 02:01:37 pm »
If u find the answer u will realise the meaning of ur life also what u have to do with this life........ IMHO

Btw nice lines
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Re: Poem
« Reply #3 on: January 29, 2014, 11:58:47 am »
When someone write poem, he must get +1 from me for sure :D
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Re: Poem
« Reply #4 on: March 30, 2014, 07:05:45 pm »
I really enjoyed your poem. I was very easy to relate to. Keep up the writing! I have been writing for about 8 years no and I found it is the best escape.
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