Intoxicated - Lyrical Dubstep

[hanorotu]

http://soundcloud.com/hanorotu/intoxicated


Discuss.

[Kulverstukas]

Oh no. Love songs!
Like the breakdown and the beat, but words...? Nah

[ande]

Its not bad really. As a dubstep lover myself, I like it. Its not the best ive heard, and its not a song ill put on repeat. But I would put it in some playlist of mine.

If you want a little more critic you can read the following text.

Some of the text is cool, but other parts of it is a bit to.. Idk, love song. Perhaps a tiny bit to much vocal in general. Then again, it totally depends on the dubstep you are wanting to create.
I am not sure how much bass was in this song, I listened to it on my laptop. But I think I would like to hear a bit more bass, deep bass. The dubstep woobs are good, not perfect but good. I cant quite put my fingers on whats not perfect on the woobs, but something is not perfect.

Just my two cents Idd like to hear more from you.

[hanorotu]

Its not bad really. As a dubstep lover myself, I like it. Its not the best ive heard, and its not a song ill put on repeat. But I would put it in some playlist of mine.

If you want a little more critic you can read the following text.

Some of the text is cool, but other parts of it is a bit to.. Idk, love song. Perhaps a tiny bit to much vocal in general. Then again, it totally depends on the dubstep you are wanting to create.
I am not sure how much bass was in this song, I listened to it on my laptop. But I think I would like to hear a bit more bass, deep bass. The dubstep woobs are good, not perfect but good. I cant quite put my fingers on whats not perfect on the woobs, but something is not perfect.

Just my two cents Idd like to hear more from you.

Thank you for the criticism. As not much of a dubstep fan myself, this is what, in my opinion, I think dubstep should sound like. With more rhythm and less spontaneity. I just can't get into the seemed randomness of regular dubstep. However, I may work at it with other songs, and try to get the dubstep feel that everyone loves with my own spin. This is what I do with all of my songs as a matter of fact. I try to have my own style.

On another note, the very end, I hate. It sounded good in the studio, but after I rendered it, it sounds too cluttered.

[ande]

Thank you for the criticism. As not much of a dubstep fan myself, this is what, in my opinion, I think dubstep should sound like. With more rhythm and less spontaneity. I just can't get into the seemed randomness of regular dubstep. However, I may work at it with other songs, and try to get the dubstep feel that everyone loves with my own spin. This is what I do with all of my songs as a matter of fact. I try to have my own style.

On another note, the very end, I hate. It sounded good in the studio, but after I rendered it, it sounds too cluttered.

I just had to listen to it with a headset, so I just did. Sounds a lot better with a good headset. I take back the part I said about the vocals, is good. I really do like this song after listening to it with a headset.

Tho I still think it should have more bass. I think a simple bass filter turn up on the background bass and the deeper drums would do the trick. I also take back 50% of what I said about the woob not being perfect


EDIT: Also, who is doing the vocals?

[hanorotu]

Nate Monoxide,  http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HpPmCOA66X8
That is the original, I got all his acapellas from him lol