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Offline Zesh

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A Step Back
« on: November 01, 2012, 11:03:34 pm »
This a little peice I came up with in the morning whilst in the bathroom :P

I take a step back
And they call me weak
When I'm not
Even though I've been to the top
It's like trying to seperate peas from the pod
You need to be able to see through the fog
To understand the opinions that people have got
A step back doesn't mean that you stop.

I like it. What do you think? ;)

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #1 on: November 02, 2012, 10:18:08 am »
I like it. +1

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #2 on: November 02, 2012, 06:30:12 pm »

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #3 on: November 03, 2012, 12:39:16 am »
You rap too? Nice :D You have quite some talent.

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #4 on: November 03, 2012, 02:23:34 am »
Its good, but these lines make no sense:

Quote from: Zesh
It's like trying to seperate peas from the pod
You need to be able to see through the fog

Why do you need to see through fog to separate peas from a pod. If you've ever done this its extremely easy, hence when we eat peas they are normally separated from the pod (except in Chinese dishes primarily)
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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #5 on: November 03, 2012, 07:07:18 am »
You rap too? Nice :D You have quite some talent.

Thanks :D

Its good, but these lines make no sense:

Why do you need to see through fog to separate peas from a pod. If you've ever done this its extremely easy, hence when we eat peas they are normally separated from the pod (except in Chinese dishes primarily)

You a misunderstanding :P These lines go together:

Even though I've been to the top
It's like trying to seperate peas from the pod

Just how peas and pods come together so does me being on top come together, if you get that :P

You need to be able to see through the fog
To understand the opinions that people have got

Now, seeing through the fog should make a lot more sense when paired with that line :D

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #6 on: November 03, 2012, 11:19:01 pm »
It's pretty good, however I wouldn't see myself using this. It's kinda bland and overdone. Sorry bro


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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #7 on: November 04, 2012, 02:57:32 am »
It's pretty good, however I wouldn't see myself using this. It's kinda bland and overdone. Sorry bro

Using it for what?

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #8 on: November 04, 2012, 03:19:17 am »
Using it for what?
Lyrics? What else?


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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #9 on: November 04, 2012, 03:47:11 am »
Lyrics? What else?

Hm..okay. I thought you had something else in mind :P

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #10 on: November 04, 2012, 06:12:54 am »
I was going to use it to fap in the EZ community sock but I got soft xD
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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #11 on: November 04, 2012, 07:27:50 pm »
I was going to use it to fap in the EZ community sock but I got soft xD

Lol, I've never heard of the EZ community sock before :P

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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #12 on: November 04, 2012, 07:30:16 pm »
For VIP use only xD
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Re: A Step Back
« Reply #13 on: November 04, 2012, 07:35:09 pm »
For VIP use only xD

Damn! I need to become a VIP :P